Great Nissin,...
Those are the ones ssjdinotycoon42,... But I thought they were at least omnivores it seems like I heard something about them eating meat and thats why they were after sarah harding when she was under the truck that is the kind of sceene Im lokking at!! We need some more hadrosaurs too I would like to do a sceene on those!!
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Im three pages into my script so far.. It's turning out pretty good but all I have is the opening scene (the idea with the talk of other villages having attacks and then the hide and seek game) The link to TS is going to be a little weird its through my online nascar racing league... wich im no good at,.. I might add lol!! But I'll post what I've got in there for the development team to see and we'll talk then here is the site..
www.titanracing.net
The reason im going on here is because I have no server to work from we will go into a private room so we don't disturb any one and Talk there
Just go to The site above and on the left side of the screen there is a menu theres teamspeak, you should be able to jump right in.. You'll need a microphone... but if you don't have one you can text in there.
If any one has a different way of talking or another speech program tell me! cause this is kinda complicated.. and there are off limits nights every other sunday, monday and tuesday and some wednesdays are all off limits because of racing mainly monday and tuesday.... Blah blah blah... any ways go ahead and see if you can get in.. and tell me what you think
www.titanracing.net
The reason im going on here is because I have no server to work from we will go into a private room so we don't disturb any one and Talk there
Just go to The site above and on the left side of the screen there is a menu theres teamspeak, you should be able to jump right in.. You'll need a microphone... but if you don't have one you can text in there.
If any one has a different way of talking or another speech program tell me! cause this is kinda complicated.. and there are off limits nights every other sunday, monday and tuesday and some wednesdays are all off limits because of racing mainly monday and tuesday.... Blah blah blah... any ways go ahead and see if you can get in.. and tell me what you think
I forgot.. You will need to down load the Teamspeak program to use it!! Just type Teamspeak2 in as a key word at yahoo or some thing and you should be fine it will show you a link to the Teamspeak site. Download for free and hop on.. After you guys have found out how to get on I'll setup a time and place.. If you guys would like to meet and chat some time this week then wednesday should be good...
C-ya
C-ya
Last edited by chase on 05 Aug 2005, 21:48, edited 1 time in total.
Ok, Heres a sample of the begining it's still in crap form and ther are some changes to be made!!! 4 sure
Jurassic Park
“Life at the edge of Chaos”
TITLES ROLL
Opening Scene-
A small village in southwestern Costa Rica, The village men are all busy working on there daily task, as the camera moves into a small hut, a small group of women are huddled around a project (project will be determined after research). The women seem frantically worried about some thing. They begin to talk revealing what they are so timid about.
A series of attacks on children and small animals have been reported by neighboring villages. The women seem to be agitated greatly by this. The women say that children will go out late in the evenings and are heard screaming in the woods. When they are found they have small bites all over there body and become very ill. Along with these attacks people have also come up missing, grown men and women, boys and girls, pets. People will just go off into the jungle and never come back!
Along with theses missing people and periodic attacks large lizards have also been reported, never alive though; only their dead carcasses are found. But these monsters are thought of as a bad omen and there presence is not to be taken likely, these creatures are refferd to as the ‘hupia’ Kidnappers that still babies at night. The villagers fear that these monsters will bring them harm and that they are the work of evil spirits.
A group of young children is found playing on the outskirts of the village, at the edge of the dense jungle around them. The kids look to be playing a game of hide and seek, they aren’t scared of the jungle as of now but they know not to go to far from the village because of their elder’s warnings of evil spirits and animals in the jungle. :The kids all disperse to there hiding places in the woods:,
:The camera follows one young boy as he passes a pair of girls, The girls turn as he walks by warning him not to go to much further into the jungle. The young boy shrugs them off as he is walking through the dense foliage, (you get the sense that he is exploring more than he is hiding) :The camera follows him as he walks seeing what he sees and hearing what he hears: A small rustle of leaves startles the boy but it’s just a small mammal a monkey or some kind of squirrel, He walks a bit further and finds a good hiding spot in a ditch below a tree. You can hear the faint sounds of the village not to far off. Then there is another sound a light chirp from above, just over the crest of the ditch and then there is another chirp from the other side. :The camera watches the boy as he listens to the noises wondering what they are. Then the camera pans down and we realize that he has stepped onto some small looking bird like eggs and broken a few, the yolks spilling to the ground, the boy does not realize this: The boy listens intently as the chirps become more erratic, It seems as if the chirps are growing in number and they sound agitated and excited.
The little boy looks up to see two small lizards (compys) looking down at him hissing, the boy is startled and begins to scream, The screams change to a quiet whimper as he begins to sob and cry, he scrambles up the hillside working his way out of the ditch, :The camera follows the boy up the side of the ditch from behind him, the camera ends up looking between his legs at multiple compys: The boy then is bitten twice in the leg. He yells at the compys, as they jump on to his body in an aggressive manner. :The camera sees the boys feet stumbling back and fourth, compys fall to the ground, there jaws and snouts covered in blood, only to jump right back up again and leap into the air.
In the village the shouts and screams of the boy can be heard, local men run into the jungle, The camera follows them threw the foliage. Then there is a view of the men as they come to see the boy lying on the ground covered in green lizards, he’s still screaming loudly. The men pause, then instantly they begin to yank the small reptiles off the boy hurling them through the jungle. One man is seen throwing them hard on the ground and then stepping on them.
(Whole scene is done in subtitles to add realism)
Fade to black:
Set in black the definition of ‘hupia’ is shown
:‘hupia’ kidnappers or thieves that silently still babies during the night:
A young man with a ball cap on sits in a hotel room watching the news half heatedly while reading a book on small dinosaurs, the news is in Spanish, The young man hears of the incident and pays very close attention. Looking away from his book he sets it down and begins writing down what the news has said. :Camera pans up at his face, He’s young about 23 to 25 years old a look of intense interest is on his face He has a scraggily dark beard and blue eyes: The man slaps the note book down and pick up a cell phone.
The Hotel room door opens..
Guitierrez: Richard, I’ve got another one
Levine: Yeah I was just about to call you (sets phone down) It’s sad
Guitierrez: Sad!… This is great!
Levine: It’s never great when it happens to a child
Guitierrez: a child?
Levine: yeah, small green lizards, just east of Golfito today, attacked a child!
Guitierrez: Oh no, is the kid ok?
Levine: They said he was in critical condition, But villagers killed some of the small lizards and kept them,
Guitierrez: Good that gives us a specimen to look at.
Levine: Not if we don’t get down there before the government does
Guitierrez: Well that will have to wait because I have something that will blow your mind.
Levine: what’s that?
Guitierrez: They found another one…
Levine: …….a big one?
Guitierrez: Yep, and actually it’s close by the area of that attack, its about twenty miles south of Golfito
Levine: When are we leaving?
Guitierrez: ..Now
:A helicopter is seen flying along the coast line as the sun is setting, Levine and Guitierrez are in the helicopter:
Levine: how’d you hear about this?
Guitierrez: I know people
Levine: No really?
Guitierrez: Well I’ve got a small lab in Golfito and some students working there
Levine: They found this?
Guitierrez: Yep.. and they haven’t told a soul, so we should be-
(cutting in)
Levine: do they know about the incident in the village (village will receive a name)
Guitierrez: Yep I have a student on his way now to pick up a specimen.. Ah there goes Golfito…. almost there!
Levine: it’s strange how they’re attacking.. small animals like this are usually scavengers
Guitierrez: Yes and I still believe they are.. I just think they are territorial and they’re protecting there territory, your right though it is strange how they are acting and it’s only been like this in recent years.
Levine: Yes they are aggressive almost like birds but they attack in packs.
Guitierrez: Birds… ayy-yie-yie… you really thinks these things are dinosaurs don’t you?
Levine: I think this (using his hands to quote) “lizard” will prove to you that these aren’t just ordinary iguana’s …. (looks out the window.. long pause) wholly sh*t!
Guitierrez: Whoa!
(a large shape is seen lying on the beach, its about 20 feet in length and near the edge of the trees)
:Camera shows helicopter landing and Levine jumping out and running toward the animal)
Levine: (laughing) I can’t believe this..
Guitierrez: wait up…
(Both men get to within 10 feet of the animal and are immediately halted by the smell of rotting flesh and decay crabs scurry away as they close in. but the carcass is covered in large flies. Levine begins to snap pictures)
Guitierrez: Whew we this thing reeks….
Levine: Yes it’s had to of been out here more than a day or so
Guitierrez: Well… what do you think it is?
Levine: I dunno,… But if I had to guess I would say a large primitive reptilian being.
Guitierrez: A dinosaur?
Levine: Yep, a pure breed of dinosaur just like the compys we’ve been finding all isolated species that have made it for almost a hundred million years just like the opossum or coelacanth-
Guitierrez: yes but-
Levine: all these species thought to be extinct, the Greenland shark,.. (takes a breath) but all were rediscovered in isolated areas.
Guitierrez: yes but a hundred million years, you can’t possibly conceive how long ago that is…
:Various shots of Gutierrez and Levine analyzing the species, both men swatting at flies and making a disgusted face:
Levine: Were running out of day light
Guitierrez: yes we’ll need to cover the sight and resume work tomorrow
Levine: well, we’ll need a sample before this thing decays any further…. Do you mind doing the honors of cutting away some tissue samples (Levine is holding a knife out for Guitierrez to use)
Guitierrez: (frowning) I guess…. (starts to cut… then gags)… God this thing smells awful… how much Levine: just a couple from above the thigh or tail… (fidgets with a black brief case looking box with a syringe)
: As Levine readies the syringe a low thumping sound is heard, It’s the sound of propeller blades)
Levine: What’s that?
Guitierrez: sounds like a helicopter
Levine: Yeah….
:A helicopter burst out from above the jungle behind them, It swings out over the water and then circles back to land on the beach it was a black huey helicopter:
Levine: Who the hell is that?
Guitierrez: Damn-…
Levine: What!
Guitierrez: Government!
Levine: hurry hide the camera film and samples (Levine hurries to get a blood sample)
Guitierrez: (stuffing the samples into his crotch) Do we protest?
Levine: I wish,..... we just have to take what we have and go
: Levine and Guitierrez gather their materials and Guitierrez starts to head back to there own helicopter. Levine stays at the site! The government men getting off the helicopter are all warring mask and one of them has a metal backpack on. The men begin to walk toward Levine
Levine: What do you plan to do with this specimen (a man walks by pushing him to the ground cursing him in Spanish, Levine then sees the man with the metal backpack pull out a long wand another man lights a butane lighter Levine realizes the men are going to burn the animal)?
Levine: No (Levin walks toward the group of men) you son of a bitch, don’t you realize how important this is… are you out of your mind! (One of the men looks at Levine gesturing that he doesn’t understand English, Levine gets closer to the man yelling) This could be the most amazing find of the 21st century… (Levine closes in on the man gesturing at him, The man then punches Levine in the stomach, and Levine shuts up quickly gasping for air)
Agent 1: Look Gringo, If you don’t shut up (pulls a small 22 pistol out of his over coat)…. I have a bullet with your name on it. So shut up…. (Smiles has a gold tooth) or I’ll shut you up. Now you can watch us burn this thing or you can get the hell outta here.
Levine: Yes S- (coughs) sir
Guitierrez: (seeing his friend in trouble he drops the samples and film removing them from his crotch and runs over to help up Levine) are you ok? (The government official has reconciled his weapon and moved away)
Levine: Yes! (Coughs hard as he regains his breath… They head back to the helicopter)
Agent1: Scientific jack asses.. our country doesn’t need this sh*t… you bastards can tell any one you want, but they won’t believe you…. Oh Gringo… you left your camera (laughs with other agents and lightly tosses the camera on to the carcass as they begin to burn it) OOPS! (laughs)
:Levine and Guitierrez climb back onto their helicopter:
(Helicopter pilot cusses Guitierrez in Spanish, saying he should’ve left them and they could’ve all been killed, Levine and Guitierrez ignore him)
Levine: I wonder why they didn’t question us or search us
Guitierrez: They’re thugs that’s why, you’re lucky to be alive-
Levine: tell me about it
Guitierrez: They aren’t cut out to do real work for the government so they go out and burn these things, they’re just… Thugs.. They don’t care to think about whether or not we have any info or film they assumed it was in your camera…
SO WHAT DO YOU THINK?
Jurassic Park
“Life at the edge of Chaos”
TITLES ROLL
Opening Scene-
A small village in southwestern Costa Rica, The village men are all busy working on there daily task, as the camera moves into a small hut, a small group of women are huddled around a project (project will be determined after research). The women seem frantically worried about some thing. They begin to talk revealing what they are so timid about.
A series of attacks on children and small animals have been reported by neighboring villages. The women seem to be agitated greatly by this. The women say that children will go out late in the evenings and are heard screaming in the woods. When they are found they have small bites all over there body and become very ill. Along with these attacks people have also come up missing, grown men and women, boys and girls, pets. People will just go off into the jungle and never come back!
Along with theses missing people and periodic attacks large lizards have also been reported, never alive though; only their dead carcasses are found. But these monsters are thought of as a bad omen and there presence is not to be taken likely, these creatures are refferd to as the ‘hupia’ Kidnappers that still babies at night. The villagers fear that these monsters will bring them harm and that they are the work of evil spirits.
A group of young children is found playing on the outskirts of the village, at the edge of the dense jungle around them. The kids look to be playing a game of hide and seek, they aren’t scared of the jungle as of now but they know not to go to far from the village because of their elder’s warnings of evil spirits and animals in the jungle. :The kids all disperse to there hiding places in the woods:,
:The camera follows one young boy as he passes a pair of girls, The girls turn as he walks by warning him not to go to much further into the jungle. The young boy shrugs them off as he is walking through the dense foliage, (you get the sense that he is exploring more than he is hiding) :The camera follows him as he walks seeing what he sees and hearing what he hears: A small rustle of leaves startles the boy but it’s just a small mammal a monkey or some kind of squirrel, He walks a bit further and finds a good hiding spot in a ditch below a tree. You can hear the faint sounds of the village not to far off. Then there is another sound a light chirp from above, just over the crest of the ditch and then there is another chirp from the other side. :The camera watches the boy as he listens to the noises wondering what they are. Then the camera pans down and we realize that he has stepped onto some small looking bird like eggs and broken a few, the yolks spilling to the ground, the boy does not realize this: The boy listens intently as the chirps become more erratic, It seems as if the chirps are growing in number and they sound agitated and excited.
The little boy looks up to see two small lizards (compys) looking down at him hissing, the boy is startled and begins to scream, The screams change to a quiet whimper as he begins to sob and cry, he scrambles up the hillside working his way out of the ditch, :The camera follows the boy up the side of the ditch from behind him, the camera ends up looking between his legs at multiple compys: The boy then is bitten twice in the leg. He yells at the compys, as they jump on to his body in an aggressive manner. :The camera sees the boys feet stumbling back and fourth, compys fall to the ground, there jaws and snouts covered in blood, only to jump right back up again and leap into the air.
In the village the shouts and screams of the boy can be heard, local men run into the jungle, The camera follows them threw the foliage. Then there is a view of the men as they come to see the boy lying on the ground covered in green lizards, he’s still screaming loudly. The men pause, then instantly they begin to yank the small reptiles off the boy hurling them through the jungle. One man is seen throwing them hard on the ground and then stepping on them.
(Whole scene is done in subtitles to add realism)
Fade to black:
Set in black the definition of ‘hupia’ is shown
:‘hupia’ kidnappers or thieves that silently still babies during the night:
A young man with a ball cap on sits in a hotel room watching the news half heatedly while reading a book on small dinosaurs, the news is in Spanish, The young man hears of the incident and pays very close attention. Looking away from his book he sets it down and begins writing down what the news has said. :Camera pans up at his face, He’s young about 23 to 25 years old a look of intense interest is on his face He has a scraggily dark beard and blue eyes: The man slaps the note book down and pick up a cell phone.
The Hotel room door opens..
Guitierrez: Richard, I’ve got another one
Levine: Yeah I was just about to call you (sets phone down) It’s sad
Guitierrez: Sad!… This is great!
Levine: It’s never great when it happens to a child
Guitierrez: a child?
Levine: yeah, small green lizards, just east of Golfito today, attacked a child!
Guitierrez: Oh no, is the kid ok?
Levine: They said he was in critical condition, But villagers killed some of the small lizards and kept them,
Guitierrez: Good that gives us a specimen to look at.
Levine: Not if we don’t get down there before the government does
Guitierrez: Well that will have to wait because I have something that will blow your mind.
Levine: what’s that?
Guitierrez: They found another one…
Levine: …….a big one?
Guitierrez: Yep, and actually it’s close by the area of that attack, its about twenty miles south of Golfito
Levine: When are we leaving?
Guitierrez: ..Now
:A helicopter is seen flying along the coast line as the sun is setting, Levine and Guitierrez are in the helicopter:
Levine: how’d you hear about this?
Guitierrez: I know people
Levine: No really?
Guitierrez: Well I’ve got a small lab in Golfito and some students working there
Levine: They found this?
Guitierrez: Yep.. and they haven’t told a soul, so we should be-
(cutting in)
Levine: do they know about the incident in the village (village will receive a name)
Guitierrez: Yep I have a student on his way now to pick up a specimen.. Ah there goes Golfito…. almost there!
Levine: it’s strange how they’re attacking.. small animals like this are usually scavengers
Guitierrez: Yes and I still believe they are.. I just think they are territorial and they’re protecting there territory, your right though it is strange how they are acting and it’s only been like this in recent years.
Levine: Yes they are aggressive almost like birds but they attack in packs.
Guitierrez: Birds… ayy-yie-yie… you really thinks these things are dinosaurs don’t you?
Levine: I think this (using his hands to quote) “lizard” will prove to you that these aren’t just ordinary iguana’s …. (looks out the window.. long pause) wholly sh*t!
Guitierrez: Whoa!
(a large shape is seen lying on the beach, its about 20 feet in length and near the edge of the trees)
:Camera shows helicopter landing and Levine jumping out and running toward the animal)
Levine: (laughing) I can’t believe this..
Guitierrez: wait up…
(Both men get to within 10 feet of the animal and are immediately halted by the smell of rotting flesh and decay crabs scurry away as they close in. but the carcass is covered in large flies. Levine begins to snap pictures)
Guitierrez: Whew we this thing reeks….
Levine: Yes it’s had to of been out here more than a day or so
Guitierrez: Well… what do you think it is?
Levine: I dunno,… But if I had to guess I would say a large primitive reptilian being.
Guitierrez: A dinosaur?
Levine: Yep, a pure breed of dinosaur just like the compys we’ve been finding all isolated species that have made it for almost a hundred million years just like the opossum or coelacanth-
Guitierrez: yes but-
Levine: all these species thought to be extinct, the Greenland shark,.. (takes a breath) but all were rediscovered in isolated areas.
Guitierrez: yes but a hundred million years, you can’t possibly conceive how long ago that is…
:Various shots of Gutierrez and Levine analyzing the species, both men swatting at flies and making a disgusted face:
Levine: Were running out of day light
Guitierrez: yes we’ll need to cover the sight and resume work tomorrow
Levine: well, we’ll need a sample before this thing decays any further…. Do you mind doing the honors of cutting away some tissue samples (Levine is holding a knife out for Guitierrez to use)
Guitierrez: (frowning) I guess…. (starts to cut… then gags)… God this thing smells awful… how much Levine: just a couple from above the thigh or tail… (fidgets with a black brief case looking box with a syringe)
: As Levine readies the syringe a low thumping sound is heard, It’s the sound of propeller blades)
Levine: What’s that?
Guitierrez: sounds like a helicopter
Levine: Yeah….
:A helicopter burst out from above the jungle behind them, It swings out over the water and then circles back to land on the beach it was a black huey helicopter:
Levine: Who the hell is that?
Guitierrez: Damn-…
Levine: What!
Guitierrez: Government!
Levine: hurry hide the camera film and samples (Levine hurries to get a blood sample)
Guitierrez: (stuffing the samples into his crotch) Do we protest?
Levine: I wish,..... we just have to take what we have and go
: Levine and Guitierrez gather their materials and Guitierrez starts to head back to there own helicopter. Levine stays at the site! The government men getting off the helicopter are all warring mask and one of them has a metal backpack on. The men begin to walk toward Levine
Levine: What do you plan to do with this specimen (a man walks by pushing him to the ground cursing him in Spanish, Levine then sees the man with the metal backpack pull out a long wand another man lights a butane lighter Levine realizes the men are going to burn the animal)?
Levine: No (Levin walks toward the group of men) you son of a bitch, don’t you realize how important this is… are you out of your mind! (One of the men looks at Levine gesturing that he doesn’t understand English, Levine gets closer to the man yelling) This could be the most amazing find of the 21st century… (Levine closes in on the man gesturing at him, The man then punches Levine in the stomach, and Levine shuts up quickly gasping for air)
Agent 1: Look Gringo, If you don’t shut up (pulls a small 22 pistol out of his over coat)…. I have a bullet with your name on it. So shut up…. (Smiles has a gold tooth) or I’ll shut you up. Now you can watch us burn this thing or you can get the hell outta here.
Levine: Yes S- (coughs) sir
Guitierrez: (seeing his friend in trouble he drops the samples and film removing them from his crotch and runs over to help up Levine) are you ok? (The government official has reconciled his weapon and moved away)
Levine: Yes! (Coughs hard as he regains his breath… They head back to the helicopter)
Agent1: Scientific jack asses.. our country doesn’t need this sh*t… you bastards can tell any one you want, but they won’t believe you…. Oh Gringo… you left your camera (laughs with other agents and lightly tosses the camera on to the carcass as they begin to burn it) OOPS! (laughs)
:Levine and Guitierrez climb back onto their helicopter:
(Helicopter pilot cusses Guitierrez in Spanish, saying he should’ve left them and they could’ve all been killed, Levine and Guitierrez ignore him)
Levine: I wonder why they didn’t question us or search us
Guitierrez: They’re thugs that’s why, you’re lucky to be alive-
Levine: tell me about it
Guitierrez: They aren’t cut out to do real work for the government so they go out and burn these things, they’re just… Thugs.. They don’t care to think about whether or not we have any info or film they assumed it was in your camera…
SO WHAT DO YOU THINK?
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change the title to just "Jurassic Park: The Edge of Chaos" or "The Edge of Chaos: Jurassic Park"...short titles tend to sound better in the public mind
(this all comes right after the Universal Logo) the title comes after the "Universal Studios Presents" and "A (Director) Film
have someone come into the village asking questions. then the women(or whoever) will be telling him the stories, while this is intercut with the hide and seek game, cutting back and forth until the screams are heard. then the person asking questions will run with the men and discover the boy with them
remove the curses, they might not make the PG-13 rating(for example change "wholly sh*t" to "oh my god" in a low voice)
they would probably know about Isla Sorna already..it's common knowledge in their world
have the government people(military?? i remember in the book it was) be running to the site instead of walking
have him put the sample in his POCKET...instead of..in there /dry.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid="<_<" border="0" alt="dry.gif" /> ..
the gold tooth is too much /biggrin.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":D" border="0" alt="biggrin.gif" />
don't make the government agents so evil, they wouldn't be like that in real life. they would most likely just be silent. the most probable situation would be that they run over to the site, don't say a word(they would probably already know what to do) knock the guy out of the way, and just get down to business(burning)
a lot of these lines are too long and don't sound like something someone would really say.
some of those lines would work better like this:
"Oh no, is he alright?"
"Would you do the honors?" smiles and pulls out a knife
"Now get the hell outta here"
(the last line) "Thank goodness for these." Pulls out samples from his POCKET /biggrin.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":D" border="0" alt="biggrin.gif" />
(this all comes right after the Universal Logo) the title comes after the "Universal Studios Presents" and "A (Director) Film
have someone come into the village asking questions. then the women(or whoever) will be telling him the stories, while this is intercut with the hide and seek game, cutting back and forth until the screams are heard. then the person asking questions will run with the men and discover the boy with them
remove the curses, they might not make the PG-13 rating(for example change "wholly sh*t" to "oh my god" in a low voice)
they would probably know about Isla Sorna already..it's common knowledge in their world
have the government people(military?? i remember in the book it was) be running to the site instead of walking
have him put the sample in his POCKET...instead of..in there /dry.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid="<_<" border="0" alt="dry.gif" /> ..
the gold tooth is too much /biggrin.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":D" border="0" alt="biggrin.gif" />
don't make the government agents so evil, they wouldn't be like that in real life. they would most likely just be silent. the most probable situation would be that they run over to the site, don't say a word(they would probably already know what to do) knock the guy out of the way, and just get down to business(burning)
a lot of these lines are too long and don't sound like something someone would really say.
some of those lines would work better like this:
"Oh no, is he alright?"
"Would you do the honors?" smiles and pulls out a knife
"Now get the hell outta here"
(the last line) "Thank goodness for these." Pulls out samples from his POCKET /biggrin.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":D" border="0" alt="biggrin.gif" />
I like the Idea of the women talking and the hide and seek being enterlaced,
I too think the gold tooth might have went to far..
and yes, I have been watching to many 'R' rated movies latley and do need to cut the cussing..
BUT
I did like my evil, lazy government guys and I like how he kind of 'punks' (for lack of a better term) levine,
*that comes form a personal experience with the police in mexico, I know I know it's Costa Rica, But Hey,,
and the stuffing of samples into his crotch was for a little comic relief...
Your Ideas are good though,.. but where to go from here? Im thinking I want to incorperate my Dodgson sceen... Idunno
Keep in mind we can have multiple opening scenes for a director to choose from
Thanks for your input!
I too think the gold tooth might have went to far..
and yes, I have been watching to many 'R' rated movies latley and do need to cut the cussing..
BUT
I did like my evil, lazy government guys and I like how he kind of 'punks' (for lack of a better term) levine,
*that comes form a personal experience with the police in mexico, I know I know it's Costa Rica, But Hey,,
and the stuffing of samples into his crotch was for a little comic relief...
Your Ideas are good though,.. but where to go from here? Im thinking I want to incorperate my Dodgson sceen... Idunno
Keep in mind we can have multiple opening scenes for a director to choose from
Thanks for your input!
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